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Outstanding writing from Totara

Totara Students —

We have been writing creative stories using only two of our five senses.

Written by Sid

I woke up feeling strange I couldn't see at all. It was like I didn't know if my eyes were open or closed.

Then there was touch I couldn't feel anything or at least much. I could feel the coldness of the walls. When I stroked theme with my hands and after all I didn't even know if I was in bed or not. I could hear some kind of ticking in the walls as if they were alive.

I decided to get up and find the way out because I certainly was not in my room anymore. I reached what I thought was the exit after stumbling around blindly for fifteen minutes. I opened it and heard the walls ticking again. My instinct told me to duck and its never let me down so that's what I did. As soon as I ducked I felt the whoosh of air above me and heard a metallic sound as the wall cracked. I got up and felt around to find a large hole in the wall beside me and then I heard the heavy breathing. I was NOT alone! To be continued....


Written by Gabriel

Bub, Bub, Bub...I feel my heart pounding as if something really big happened. I attempt to open my eyes. It feels like they are open but aren't at the same time. Although I can hear and feel? I slowly guide by way to standing up. I start to walk forward with my arms in front of me. I feel something. I start to move my hands around it. It seems flat on top. I pull my hand down the sides and feel two poles. As my hands hit the ground I feel an old crisp wood that's been there for years and not only that its feels like 35 degrees in here maybe I'm in a room in the dessert? I am trying to think what I just felt. I think it’s a, I think it’s a, a, a table? Music starts to play it's like jazz but with the music backwards. Crank, crank it felt like something was moving. I continue walking forward and hit my hands on something, something stern. I move my hands around it. I hit something like a bulb, right spanking in the middle, of the steel wall. I feel around the bulb and realise it’s a dial and moving my hands around it more could it be a safe? To be continued...


Written by Jono

I woke up, wait 'where am I?'. I could feel cold marble on the floor. I tried to open my eyes...I can't...I can't see. I get up and stumble across the floor and tripped over what felt like a couch. I heard glass smash. I felt nauseous. Where am I!

"Oh, your awake"

"Why can't I see you?" His voice sounded crackly like through a speaker.

"Who am I...Oh that's not important. All I can say is that you're being watched and I suggest you start moving, you don't want to end up like Jack. He didn't make it out".

"You're sick", he laughed.

"Feel free to leave. You just have to find the exit. You have around 10 minutes".

I started desperately feeling around for anything. "No, no, no!" I started to feel worse "ARGH LET ME OUT". (more laughing). I was smashing and tipping things over..."12 seconds left".

I started losing consciousness. "10..9..8.." I kicked the wall, my foot hit something. "What...a lever!"

3..2..1...using all my strength in me I pulled it...I felt a rush of wind and adrenalin "wait"...my feet weren't touching the ground...it was like I was floating. My senses started coming back. I think I could see? Everything was black. I wasn't in the room anymore. I blinding white light grew increasingly brighter. "Congratulations 9Z, you're survived take 4b of the Oculus Experiment, follow me..."    To be continued...