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Year 5 Writing

Michelle Clark —

The Year 5's have been busy writing creatively this week. They were given the concept of being stranded on an island, with no devices. They had to choose the people who joined them and the reason why they were there, along with three main items that they were 'stranded' with. We asked that they just introduce their adventure, building anticipation and excitement in the first few paragraphs to encourage the reader to want to read on further. We have had some amazing story starters - here are a few to entertain you!

Stranded - By Leo Rhodes

B0OM as the helicopter hit the icy cold sea I wondered if I would make it out of this horrible situation alive, though I probably wouldn't, I may as well try. This was meant to be a relaxing tourist trip but ended up as a disaster.

I unsubmerged from the water and landed on the burning hot sand, while near me lay the pilot and my brother .I picked myself up and headed towards them only to be ambushed by a committee of vultures. I grabbed them by the hand and dragged them into the thick jungle and laid them down to rest, waiting for them to wake up.

I rummaged through my backpack and found matches, a pocket knife and a bag of snacks.I took out the pocket knife and started to cut some thin branches and put them in a pile and surrounded the sticks with rock so the fire wouldn’t spread.I struck the matches until eventually they lit up and I threw the match into the mountain of sticks and the flame burst out consuming the sticks. I reached into my bag and grabbed my snacks hoping I would make it out alive.

Stranded - By Caleb Moreton

Zoom! Squelsh! Squelsh! Oh, hi there. I’m Zach, and I’m going to tell you how I got here. I’m kinda in a rush because heaps of pirates are chasing me so I’ll make it quite quick. Anyway I’ll go back to the beginning.

One day I was just going out on a family fishing trip with my dad and my brother when all of a sudden a shoal of giant squid came and went circling around us. They attacked our boat wrapping their long arms around it and not letting go. Well, at least until my dad grabbed some spears (we always come prepared) and threw them directly at their eyeballs.

They backed away and dove back under the sea, except one of them. That one turned and came charging right at us. It put a hole in the boat so heaps of water gushed in, it was so scary.

Just when I thought it had enough, it turned right back and it (again) charged straight for us. It came so fast that it knocked my dad and my brother right off the boat, the current pulled them away all the way back to shore. I didn’t know what to do, the boat was sinking, and fast!

I grabbed a life jacket, emergency beacon and some tools (you never know there might be some driftwood) and then quickly jumped out of the boat and chased after my dad and brother. Except I went the opposite way and instead went further out to sea.

I was floating for quite some time but eventually I landed on this island full of palm trees. I pressed the emergency button on the beacon and heard It beep. “I might as well have a look around while I’m waiting” I thought. So I walked around the island and eventually saw this giant cross on the sand. In movies they usually dig it up so I decided I would too.

After digging it up I discovered it was a huge treasure chest filled with gold. I took off my life jacket and used it as a bucket to put the gold in. I walked into the middle of the island and that's when I saw those pirates, they chased me but that’s another story.


Stranded - By Eunice Chae

Finally, we arrived. I could see the seagulls flying across the sky and the crystal clear ocean around us. I was in love with the island at first sight! Oops! I forgot to introduce myself! My name is Eunice. I won this strange event called 'Travel The Island'. I was allowed to bring three people and I was only allowed to bring three items. But I was not allowed to bring phones and that is really suspicious because if I get in trouble I can’t call anyone. Anyway I brought Amanda, Ashley and Lisa with me. Amanda and Ashley were twins and Lisa begged me to go to the island because she wanted to get away from her younger sister. Ashley and Amanda had red hair and freckles just like Ron from Harry Potter and Lisa had black hair just like me. Lisa, Amanda and Ashley didn’t have a particular talent but we were here to have fun, not work so I just decided to bring my friends and have fun. But Amanda and Ashley were really good at building blanket forts so I thought they could build a house made out of big leaves and branches too. I picked a huge bag of beef jerky, another large bag of cheese and a massive bottle of water for the three items. The event flyer said the island is an unnamed island between Australia and New Zealand. We didn’t find out much about the island and it was getting dark so we slept on the smooth sand for the night...